auk auk
moreover
by the stover,
her bows
her mirror
in a box,
she stows
the rose-red
river home
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auk auk
moreover
by the stover,
her bows
her mirror
in a box,
she stows
the rose-red
river home
ayaladn 
I’m getting a better sense of where you are coming from. Go to is still hard for me yet. It’s not that I am not familiar with the short line style, I think it’s the sparseness of information. Do you really want the reader to work that hard? Or, perhaps you’re not interested in the reader-also a valid point. A couple of the posts from today, I got a much better sense abut what was going on, like the feng shai poem. Thanks for continuing to look at my stuff. KB
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Dear KB,
I read every post you send, I follow you & like again the especially fine, the only qualification I make;
the body of your verse is fine: your last post was a balm to me. Among my recent posts, some set out for
your certain self (not fyi, as they say), your eyes, from a friend.
About ‘Go to’, if that’s feng shui (pronounced fung schway, long a), it’s been updated. I don’t know
if you are e-mailed such, if not look back in: small but significant changes, closer to its truest. ‘Go to’,
in another poem? I’ll look back myself, or reply & point me to it. I write for those who read & others.
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